I am a Year 7 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Ila Your background is effective in a good manner. Also because the gif feels like I'm in it because its always making movement and also you could add: it was a intense cloudy morning, because the word intense can improve it a little bit more and also it can come in impact with other people. I also like the story you wrote because it gives people an emotional effect towards reality. Has the story that you wrote ever happened in your life? Also what was the green things that you saw in the story?
Hi Ila
ReplyDeleteYour background is effective in a good manner. Also because the gif feels like I'm in it because its always making movement and also you could add: it was a intense cloudy morning, because the word intense can improve it a little bit more and also it can come in impact with other people. I also like the story you wrote because it gives people an emotional effect towards reality. Has the story that you wrote ever happened in your life? Also what was the green things that you saw in the story?